Wednesday, March 16, 2016
Elevator Pitch No. 3
After reading the feedback from my last Pitch, I believe I made some good changes and have made a much better pitch this time around. Some feedback that helped me was that I should try and stay still and not move around too much and that I should try and keep my unnecessary hand gestures to a minimum. I also dressed better and tried to speak slowly and more clearly than my previous attempt. I was also more dynamic in this pitch in that I was not on a webcam and I was outside.
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Hi Thomas, I like the idea. I think the vision on saving and health is a great one. My only concern is not everyone would think it is safe to invite random people to their homes, even those in "good neighborhoods." I genuinely like idea though. I like that you have responded well to the constructive criticism. Great job! All the best in your endeavors. See my post here... http://acwilliams83.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-3.html
ReplyDeleteHi Thomas,
ReplyDeleteI like your idea and enjoyed listening to your elevator pitch, it was very clear and you explained how your venture would work. My only critique for improvement is the way you filmed your pitch, I think it would be better if you could set the camera down somewhere because holding it up as you filmed made it move as you spoke and it was a bit distracting. Good job on dressing for it too! Check my pitch out if you'd like http://carolinalafuent3003.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html