Wednesday, February 17, 2016

Elevator Pitch No. 2

 I did not upload my original elevator pitch, so I was not able to get feedback but I will mention what I did to make it as best as I could. I recognized quickly after several attempts that being prepared and knowing exactly what you want to say is key. I changed what I said after a few takes and found what sounded most fluid and real. I think I could definitely work more at removing filler words and making my ideas come across clearly in less time and I will work on these things for my next one.
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  1. KevinFebruary 23, 2016 at 1:56 AM

    Hey Thomas,

    I think your pitch can benefit with better, more purposeful body language. Keep in mind of your body swaying and your hand gestures. It comes off slightly casual. But if you keep your feet planted at times, use appropriate hand gesture, these cues can greatly help sell your idea. I think your idea is very creative! However I think it could be a logistical nightmare. Garnering enough interest, have a steady supply of fruits and avoiding wrath of the farmers. However with a steadfast will, you can overcome these challenges!

    Check out my blog here! http://kevindoanent3003.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-pt-2.html

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  2. UnknownFebruary 23, 2016 at 4:35 PM

    I think you pitch went well! I don't like to much body gestures, unless there's excitement or or emphasis on something. I do have to say you should have had someone video tape you instead of a webcam. I like the idea, but be ready for the backlash of farmers. Maybe cooperation with them can solve the challenges and everything else will be okay! Fill free to give me advice on my topic as well!

    http://jamestdrake25.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2-week-7.html

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  3. UnknownFebruary 25, 2016 at 7:15 PM

    Hey there, Thomas
    For starters, I really like what you've done with your blog-- I haven't seen one like this in my whole time coming across through different ones. In terms of your pitch, I think you have an amazing idea. I would definitely use this to get my fruits and vegetables. The only thing I would suggest is having a little more enthusiasm to keep your potential investors completely interested in everything you have to say. Keep up the good work and good luck with the rest of your semester.
    You can check out my pitch here:
    http://ariannaschmid.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html

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  4. EMXFebruary 25, 2016 at 8:29 PM

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  5. EMXFebruary 25, 2016 at 8:29 PM

    Hey Thomas!

    Liked your pitch and think you got a solid idea to go with your pitch. One this I would recommend is to work on your pauses. If you pause in your talking make sure it is either for people to take in the information presented or to put emphasis on the previous spoken sentence. Also If you dress professionally it really boosts the way you talk without you even thinking about it! I would recommend it but besides that I think you did a good job of presenting and thought it was a pretty interesting idea.

    You should check mine out as well!

    http://enriqueteie.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no2.html

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